sounds like you're head in the right. what i suggest is to get some different feeling beats. your flow and lyrics are decent, so all i say is mix it up. now a days to get everyone's ears on you world, mixing it up is the best way. have you heard of GymClassHeroes? their stuff is okay. i think they could do better. the rapper kinda sucks.... but if you spit to so rock sounding beat or guitar, you'd set your sound apart from the other up and coming hiphop artist. as for you words, it seems down to earth. (if you knew me, you'd know how much i hate to hear the same game plan over and over.... and that's what lotz of rappers do... talk about nothing but jen-juice, sex, and hoes.) well hope that helps. good luck bro.

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Yeah Thanks for the feed back. Yeah the beat has changed, I talked to my producer last week about that. And I feel ya on talking about the same stuff over and over... You won't here that from me. I'm trying to bring the fun back to hip hop. Something you can turn up and listen too. When I get done with more that I can post, I will let you know.

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damn u nice son we should collab sumtime wun thing tho on that beat u were going a lil off like on da hook an jus mix ur muzik down a lil more so it sound professional other than that nice flow an delivery

Thanks for the words. I have a different beat on the new version and it's thrown down in the studio. This version was done on my computer so I could hear it and lock it in my mind. Thanks for the feed back I will hit ya with the new version soon.

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o iight then buh if u do do it on the comp again try an get adobe auditions its a real good program

the vocals in the 3 1/4 of the song clip a bit, the rest sounds good

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Thanks! Workin' hard to make it hot!

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Sorry bout the late reply man. But It's pretty decent. What kinda mic do you own??? If you have a pop filter it will get rid of the muffling a bit. That's how I started when I was first rapping. Now my stuff sound like this: [link]

Practice the flow a bit more, it's still pretty good IMO.

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The audio not working right now... But yeah it was a test to see how it would sound. No filter or anything. I'm in Arizona and don't have access like I do in Detroit. Found no studios yet.

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